Title: Subroutine
fandom or original fic genre: Fanfiction
Characters/Pairings: Jet Bradley, Alan Bradley, Sam Flynn, Kevin Flynn
Rating: PG-13 - standardized violence and adult language
Word Count: - (So far): 36,877

( Preview: Chapter Seven )

snowynight

Title: Wonderland
fandom or original fic genre: Marvel comics, Horror
Characters/Pairings: Luke Cage, Danny Rand, Stephen Strange
Rating: PG13
Word Count: 1369 words

First time posting here! This story 's my first attempt to write a horror story and I would especially like help in structure and the atmosphere.

( cut for the text )

faerie_dreamer

Title: Flirtation
fandom or original fic genre: Orig. fic, Fantasy
Characters/Pairings: Puck & Peaseblossom
Rating: PG13
Word Count: 600 words

First time posting here, so here goes. I'm using Puck & Peaseblossom from A Midsummer Night's Dream, but putting them in the context of my own writing - I use Puck a lot, but then, he's been around. It's just a quick little scene.

( Flirtation )

dramedistatales

Title: Pieces of Comfort
fandom or original fic genre: Fandom. Harry Potter.
Characters/Pairings: Hermione. Hermione Granger/ Ron Weasley.
Rating: PG-13.
Word Count: 2, 221.

I would really love to know how I did with Hermione's characterization and with couple interaction. Hermione is my favorite character and Hermione/Ron my OTP, so I'd like to know if I managed something positive in those areas.

( Pieces of Comfort )

Current Mood: nervous

jjhunter

Title: Knight of Faith
Chapter: Knight and Squire (Pt. 5)
Fandom or original fic genre: Batman/BtVS
Characters/Pairings: Xander Harris is the point-of-view character; Batman/Bruce Wayne is the voice in his head.
Rating: PG-13+/M
Summary: YAHF. Alfred would be proud.
Word Count: current chapter, approximately 5,750 words. Total words to date: ~20,000
A/N: Special thanks go to Kierkegaard and Christopher M. Drohan. Thanks also to my fabulous beta,

moragmacpherson. Subsequent chapters will be posted over at AO3 and my LJ journal

idhren24.

First four chapters (and excellent feedback by

supermouse) posted to the comm here. Fifth chapter here; thank you

badbookworm for the fab concrit there. Sixth chapter here. Seventh chapter here.

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SPECIFICALLY LOOKING FOR feedback re: diction. In this installment, I introduce a new character who canonically has one of the worst fake accents I have ever heard. Kendra's 'Jamaican' accent is cited as a prime example on TV Tropes' What the Hell Is That Accent page. She's a linguistic nightmare for me to write. The POV character who picks her up at the airport is a reflexive code-switcher, so he also picks up traces of the accent.

O Wise People, do I pull off the accent? And does the code-switching work for you as a reader?

For those who would like to skip straight to the point, the airport scene begins, "Xander wasn’t interested in his aptitude test results. Not one bit." And for reference, here's an example of Kendra's canonical dialogue: "Den I suggest ya move quickly. Eastern exposure. De sun will be comin' in a few hours. More dan enough time for me to find your girlfriend."

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As always, any and all feedback in general is both welcome and appreciated. Hope someone else will join me in posting soon so that I can return the favor!

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jjhunter

Title: Knight of Faith
Chapter: Knight and Squire (Pt. 4)
Fandom or original fic genre: Batman/BtVS
Characters/Pairings: Xander Harris is the point-of-view character; Batman/Bruce Wayne is the voice in his head.
Rating: PG-13+/M
Summary: YAHF. Alfred would be proud.
Word Count: seventh chapter, approximately 3,200 words. Total words to date: ~14,800
A/N: Special thanks go to Kierkegaard and Christopher M. Drohan. Thanks also to my fabulous beta,

moragmacpherson. Subsequent chapters will be posted over at AO3 and my LJ journal

idhren24.

First four chapters (and excellent feedback by

supermouse) posted to the comm here. Fifth chapter here; thank you

badbookworm for the fab concrit there. Sixth chapter here.

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WARNING: strong language

SPECIFICALLY LOOKING FOR: general feedback on use of dialogue tags/conveying emotions & thoughts of non point-of-view characters; pacing of the middle section -- too fast? too abstract? etc.; realism of argument in final section. I'm establishing a back story for a couple who are emotionally abusive toward each other and their son, and I'm hoping for a spot-check on its plausibility.

Any and all types of feedback are both welcome and treasured. I look forward to hearing what you think.

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jjhunter

Title: Knight of Faith
Chapter: Knight and Squire (Pt. 3)
Fandom or original fic genre: Batman/BtVS
Characters/Pairings: Xander Harris is the point-of-view character; Batman/Bruce Wayne is the voice in his head.
Rating: PG-13+/M
Summary: YAHF. Alfred would be proud.
Word Count: sixth chapter, approximately 2,700 words. Total words to date: ~11,500
A/N: Special thanks go to Kierkegaard and Christopher M. Drohan. Thanks also to my fabulous beta,

moragmacpherson. Subsequent chapters will be posted over at AO3 and my LJ journal

idhren24.

First four chapters (and excellent feedback by

supermouse) posted to the comm here. Fifth chapter here; thank you

badbookworm for the fab concrit there.

In this chapter, I'm specifically looking for feedback on the following fronts: is the pacing appropriate for the subject material? How accessible is this chapter to readers who aren't intimately familiar with BtVS season two? Does the strained dynamic between Bruce and Xander ring true? Does the chapter feel like it came to a natural close? And finally, which themes are coming through, and is there anything you see that ought to be/could be made more explicit to enrich the text?

As always, concrit of any length on any front is much appreciated and truly treasured. I look forward to hearing what you think.

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healingmirth

(Whoops, I meant to post this earlier, but maybe someone is looking for a weekend writing exercise!)

from National Public Radio, Three Minute Fiction Round 5. Stories are due 11:59 PM Eastern time, this Sunday September 26th.

Our contest has a simple premise: Listeners send in original short stories that can be read in three minutes or less. We're looking for original work no longer than 600 words.

Each round, our judges throw out a challenge. This time, your story must begin with the line, "Some people swore that the house was haunted." It must end with, "Nothing was ever the same again after that."

About Our Judge, Michael Cunningham

Michael Cunningham is the author of the novels A Home at the End of the World, Flesh and Blood, The Hours (winner of a PEN/Faulkner Award and the Pulitzer Prize) and Specimen Days. He lives in New York. Farrar, Straus and Giroux will publish his latest novel, By Nightfall, on Oct. 5.

The contest is open to legal residents of the fifty US states and the District of Columbia, but there's nothing stopping you from playing along at home if you wish! Complete rules, submission details, and more information available at the link above.

If you've heard of something interesting and writerly going on in the real world, or you have something going on, yourself, feel free to share.

penny_dreadful

And another - sorry for two posts in such quick succession! Again, any concrit would be most gratefully received.

Ben is angry. Every night,
As soon as he turns out the light,
Some slurping, burping, bumping Creep
Is stopping him from going to sleep.

( What's a boy to do? )

penny_dreadful

Mary’s always running wild,
A sticky-fingered, grubby child.
Her teeth are green and growing mould,
She just won’t brush them when she’s told.

( Surely this can't end well? )Any concrit much appreciated.

jjhunter

Title: Knight of Faith
Chapter: Knight and Squire (Pt. 2)
Fandom or original fic genre: Batman/BtVS
Characters/Pairings: Xander Harris is the point-of-view character; Batman/Bruce Wayne is the voice in his head.
Rating: PG-13+/M
Summary: YAHF. Alfred would be proud.
Word Count: fifth chapter, approximately 2,000 words. Total words to date: ~8,800
A/N: Special thanks go to Kierkegaard and Christopher M. Drohan. Thanks also to my fabulous new beta,

moragmacpherson. Subsequent chapters will be posted over at AO3 and my LJ journal

idhren24.

Previous four chapters (and excellent feedback by

supermouse) posted to the comm here.

This chapter was a difficult one for me. I'm specifically seeking feedback on the characterization of Buffy and Bruce, the pacing, and themes, but any and all types of feedback are both welcome and helpful.

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cathstar

Title: The House of Tulips
fandom or original fic genre: Original Fiction
Characters/Pairings: None
Rating: T
Word Count: 300 and 765

A bit of a stretch for me, because original fic is like the alcoholic beverage I say I'll taste but never have the chance to sample.

( Prologue )

( Chapter 1 )

Also crossposted to

grapevines and fictionpress.

jjhunter

Title: Knight of Faith
Fandom or original fic genre: Batman/BtVS
Characters/Pairings: Xander Harris is the point-of-view character; Batman/Bruce Wayne is the voice in his head.
Rating: PG-13+/M
Summary: YAHF. Alfred would be proud.
Word Count: First four chapters, approximately 6,600 words.
A/N: Special thanks go to Kierkegaard and Christopher M. Drohan. Subsequent chapters will be posted over at AO3, as well as at my DW journal

jjhunter (PM me to get added to the fanfiction access filter) and my LJ journal

idhren24.

I'm specifically hoping for feedback on the pacing, balance between show/tell, and character development, but any and all types of feedback are both welcome and helpful. I'm also looking for a beta to help me improve on these and other fronts--no author is good enough that s/he can't be better with a beta.

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penny_dreadful

Title: Lunaticks by Penny Dreadful
Fandom or original fic genre: Original fiction YA / fantasy / humour
Characters/Pairings: N/A
Rating: SFW
Word Count: First four chapters, approximately 6,000 words. Further chapters will be regularly uploaded to

penny_dreadful . Please feel free to add it to your circle.

( Follow me... )

disappear4you

( You're about to view content that the poster has marked as potentially inappropriate for anyone under the age of 18. )

Current Mood: amused

healingmirth

I had a thought!

Would anyone be interested in some sort of anonymized option for posting stories? I'll admit, this thought was inspired by fannish kink memes, but maybe some of you out there would like to test-run a new genre, or write something in a potentially-irritating style or what have you, in a space that's separated from your current following.

(Of course, you're also perfectly welcome to just make a new account and post the entry under that username, as people have done on the internet since the beginning of the internet.)

I'm interested in suggestions of options for allowing people to keep control over their words. I'd be happy to repost a story here for someone without their name attached (maybe with an agreement to leave it up for a month?) but there's also the option of hosting the story off-site somewhere under the author's control and discussing here. I think that published versions of google docs don't have account names attached to them? I'm sure there are other such options that I'm not aware of.

Or, if there's anything else I (or someone else!) can do to pique interest in posting or discussion: sound off!

aurora89

I'm just starting out writing original fiction again after years of fanfic only. I'm having a hard time of it and want to know if my intro grabs peoples' attention and makes them want to keep reading. I'm concerned there's not enough description at the very start, but I'm afraid if I put the description in the first scene it'll lose the reader's attention. Anyways.

Title: Intro (heh, original)
fandom or original fic genre: Original: sci-fi, I guess.
Characters/Pairings: erm, original characters?
Rating: PG
Word Count: 350ish

( But I don't want to share my body, Mom. )

Note: this is the edited version. Thanks so much for your suggestions!

Current Mood: drunk

shiromirai

Title:Four Lies and One Truth

fandom or original fic genre: Original

Characters/Pairings: Celosia

Rating: SFW

Word Count: around 1500
Author's Notes: A quick explanation, as this is more of a sequel. In a post apocalyptic world, one group - the Daughters of Saints - took over control through political and military means. Celosia Izatar was the leader of the Daughters of Saints, until she disappeared.

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Current Mood: bouncy

cathstar

Title: [SAMIL]
fandom or original fic genre: Original Fic
Characters/Pairings: Samil, Azrael, Chiba Isamu, Sasaki Yuuma/ No pairings
Rating: Teen
Word Count: 866
Author's Note: I don't write original fic usually D:

( I am Samil, your Peace Maker )

Also crossposted to

grapevines and

originalfiction. Written for

dailyprompt's Lemon Tea.

healingmirth

I'm sure many of you are super-busy with all manner of writing things, but I looked up from the rock I've been living under and realized it's been... a while.

So. Whatcha doin'? Anything we can do to help? Want to cheer about how well your writing is going? (or complain about how it isn't?)

Write_Good: a safe haven for concrit

Looking for ConCrit: Subroutine - [TRON 2.0/TRON: LEGACY] - 7/25 - PG-13

Looking for con crit please.

Looking for concrit please

"Pieces of Comfort"

Linguistic Learning Curve (Knight of Faith)

Concrit? (Knight of Faith)

Craving Constructive Crit (Knight of Faith)

NPR's Three Minute Fiction returns for round five.

Children's story - Monster School

Children's story - When Pigs Can Fly

More Concrit? (Knight of Faith)

The House of Tulips

Seeking Concrit

Constructive Criticism Wanted

( Follow me... )

Toys, (some feedback please?)

It's quiet, but I'm still here. Are you?

New, just really need a quick concrit to get me started!

Need A Little Help

[SAMIL]

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