This is really terrific right up to the last scene, but to get to your question -
I think a little bit of time in Rodney's head, before John wakes up, about the trust issue (or possibly making the last scene from Rodney's PoV if you can spare John's reactions to being hospitalized again) - might wrap it up better.
I'm not sure just how you could negotiate the idea that Rodney can trust John and still not follow his directions, because I think Rodney would always keep an analytical corner of his mind that said, "Yes, very well, John is your friend and he would not lie to you, but what if John is wrong?" That bit about the "bad feeling" is spot on.
I don't know. Maybe have them create a code word to use for when John has facts that he can't share with Rodney on threat of death or bodily harm. That's bound to come up again eventually!
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I think a little bit of time in Rodney's head, before John wakes up, about the trust issue (or possibly making the last scene from Rodney's PoV if you can spare John's reactions to being hospitalized again) - might wrap it up better.
I'm not sure just how you could negotiate the idea that Rodney can trust John and still not follow his directions, because I think Rodney would always keep an analytical corner of his mind that said, "Yes, very well, John is your friend and he would not lie to you, but what if John is wrong?" That bit about the "bad feeling" is spot on.
I don't know. Maybe have them create a code word to use for when John has facts that he can't share with Rodney on threat of death or bodily harm. That's bound to come up again eventually!