Children's story - When Pigs Can Fly

[penny_dreadful]

Mary’s always running wild,
A sticky-fingered, grubby child.
Her teeth are green and growing mould,
She just won’t brush them when she’s told.

 

( Surely this can't end well? )

Any concrit much appreciated.

Children's story - Monster School

[penny_dreadful]

And another - sorry for two posts in such quick succession! Again, any concrit would be most gratefully received.

Ben is angry. Every night,
As soon as he turns out the light,
Some slurping, burping, bumping Creep
Is stopping him from going to sleep.
 

( What's a boy to do? )