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[breezeshadow]

Title: Night of the Moon
Genre: Original Fantasy
Pairings: F/F, M/F
Rating: PG-13 due to some minor violence and possibly unsettling topics. Also booze, basically.
Word Count: ~5.2K words
Prompt: cottoncandy_bingo Caressing/Petting/Stroking, Party, Bruise, Person & loved one(s) injured/sick simultaneously, Cuddlepile

Story is long, so I'll link to where it is on my journal.

I would love to know a) how the imagery is, b) what was confusing/unclear and c) how the writing style is. Or anything you can think of.

Thank you!

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[elizabeth_rice]

Title: Won't Hold Back Tonight
Fandom or original fic genre: "Junjou Romantica", Romance/romantic
Characters/Pairings: Miyagi Yoh/Takatsuki Shinobu
Rating: NSFW
Word Count: 588

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I wish to improve my skills as a writer. The problem is that I don't have the distance and objectivity I need to see what my flaws are and how to correct them. I'd love to receive concrit and guidance. Thank you.